How does this paragraph sound for a persuasive research paper supporting human cloning?

Twelve million Americans are infertile and will pursue years of painful and expensive treatments to have the chance to pass their genes to their own offspring. Human cloning can offer infertile couples a chance at reproduction. Cloning technology may even prevent clinical depression, divorce, and suicide among infertile people. An example of a use for cloning, is if one partner suffered from a disease that was passed on to children by reproduction, an alternative could be to clone the other partner and have the child be a replica of one of his parents. This will allow the parents to have a child that is genetically identical to at least one of them. Cloning technology would not require a viable sperm or egg cell, but any body cell would do. This technology would be able to bypass defective gametes and possibly allow infertile couples to have their own biological children. Cloning technology may be able cure Tay-Sachs disease, cystic fibrosis, muscular dystrophy, and Huntingtons disease.

How does this paragraph sound for a persuasive research paper supporting human cloning?
Sounds good, but I don't understand how it will cure the diseases. If you're saying the clone will be disease-less, that's still not the same thing. It's not actually curing the human, though. Very ice wording and nicely said, though. Good Job! Ummm just so people know, you might possible find a way to slip the meaning of infertile in there. Hope I helped!
Reply:good so far but Thesis?
Reply:Sounds good . Maybe we should pray on it.
Reply:Good content and very informative. You do, however, seem to have some capitalization and comma splice issues.
Reply:very good. You may need to go into a deeper explanation of how the diseases you mentioned could be cured. Bypassing them and curing them are not the same thing.